Profile that needs changing.

[Mirshann d'Roesor]

Wanted opinions on this before i post any offcial char' descrip. This is an old profile from another RP site, and obviously i can't really use it as it is.
Please pick out which ideas i'll be able to use and which will be useless here....i realise i'll probably have to make a new char completely...





Character Profile: Roesor

First Name: Roesor
Last Name: -
Race: Angelic.
Age: -
Height: 5'11
Weight: 200
Blood Type: -
Hair Colour: Light grey.
Eye Clolur: Light grey
Skin Colour: Varies, depending on current climate. Usually pale.
Clothing: Loose, white, but durable pants, tied at the waist with a fading grey sash.
Alignment: Good, but is infamous for past evils.
Deity: -

Combat Profile:

Weapon Of Choice: Sword of a unique angelic design. Forged from angel feather and tempered with his own blood.
Sword Style: Own.
Armor: The feathers coating his wings can change density, and be folded around himself.
Natural Resistance: Wind, growing up flying he's grown used to it. Also bears natural resistance to magic, especially those concerning emotions.
Resistance By Apparel: Lower appareal material extremly dense around groin, shielding the area from harm.
Advantage: General combat experiance through long life and training in Edain Angel Guardianship. Aerial combat expert with vast amount of knowledge obtained through life experiance.
Disadvantage: If wings become wet, affects abilty to fly as water soaks into feathers and holds him down. Occasional fragile mental state.
Skill Set: Can bend light around himself using wings, becoming effectively invisable, but must remain stationary.
Magic Skill Set: Has basic knowledge in all magics, but only has natural abilty in those regarding emotions, the others remaining refined, but small. (i.e. can freeze a puddle but not a lake, can deflect fireballs but cannot create his own to any damaging degree)

History:
Upon their expulsion from Edain, the First shed tears, having never experianced negative emotion before, it was a combination of the tears of the First and the feathers of an Angel guardian of Edain that allowed a living enbodiment of sorrow to take shape. Only to be set upon by the angel guardian, being deemed an abombination, the being not then known as Roesor acted instinctively, and unintentionaly absorbed the guardians abilties, powers, general form and the Angels immortality.
The creator, seeing this, stayed the hostile action of his other Angels, intrigued by the existance of a being that had not been created by him.
Commonly known as Sorrow, he was despised for his uniqueness by the majority of other angels of Edain, the creator saw no other way to avoid bloodshed other than to create Sorrow a home, and to give him the potentional to create his own people. To this end the creator took twelve of the grey feathers from Sorrow and made him a dozen companions, six male and six female, each different while being of the same dark grey lineage as Sorrow himself.
The creator granted Roesor a world in which to live, near the equal of Edain itself, but bid Sorrow use it's gateways to visit other worlds if he wished, and spread his race. The daughter of an Edain arch angel accompanied Sorrow to his world, and such is the reason why his line sometimes sired angels of a lighter grey lineage, or even pure white on occasion.
Peaceful millenia passed, the Grey Angels visited the mortal world, where variations humans and half immortals such as the Elvenkind dwelled, befriending many, and making inevitable enemies.
One such enemy was a race of Elvenkind, later to be known as the Drow, and when one of the grey angels stepped out of a secret portal to meet her Elven lover, instead found him chained, and a horde of Drow waiting to push through.
Sorrow had never taught his clan of warfare, only a few of the grey angels ever ventured into the world, and the portals were thought sufficient to ensure their safety, their innate abilties were not enough to prevent the Elvenkind from slaughtering the Grey Angels, the Elvenkind used magic ripped from the words of their angel captive to prevent any density changes, taking away the angels last line of defense before piercing their flesh.
The Elvenkind mages flung Sorrow through one of his own portals into the waiting bows of more Elvenkind, who died in a hail of featherblades...
Sorrow spoke, and tore his own world asunder, killing all within, knowing none of his own survived inside it.
He travelled to that particular Elvenkind city, and let loose the sorrow within him, flooding the city with it, the pure despair flowing from him like a wave to engulf the city, the hearts of infants and old stopped, the others took blades to themselves or flung their bodies into the ground from buildings.
A small section of the city remained strong..and before the despair overcame them, a friend of the grey angel, a mage and ally Elvenkind, halted his emotional assault, saving a sparse hundered from an entire city, which fled below ground to escape any further retribution. Naming the angel in their own tongue L 'Mirshann d' Roesor.
The Angel of Sorrow.


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[Vasriina Frerahel]

[color=olive:f5rkt70b]Hey! It looks good to me. Then again, I didn't put stats in my profile. So, you would have to get the opinion of somebody else in that category. Besides that though, Everything seems pretty well put together. If you are still unsure, check out the other profiles of people's characters in the OOC section to get more ideas, and references. Check out mine below, if you want to... [/color:f5rkt70b]

[url=viewtopic.php?t=900:f5rkt70b]Go ahead. Click me.[/url:f5rkt70b]

[Argoth]

It looks fine to also. I didn't even put anything like that myself...

[Mirshann d'Roesor]

It was more the history of the character that concerned me o.o but thankyou both.