Inrii's story

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Inrii's story

Post by veraka » Wed Apr 07, 2010 5:09 am

Not a bad of a start, to say the least. I like the secretiveness of Jezz's character.
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Post by Inriiaynrae Jaelre » Sat Apr 10, 2010 7:03 am

thanks.
any words of advice are helpful.

i added up to her night of discovering her magic.

i did decide RP order that eventully will be used:
vale of shadows,
nightmares,
edge of breathing swamp.

for the sake of the story some things may be tweeked to fit what i need, but it will be basically whats played.
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Post by Inriiaynrae Jaelre » Sat Apr 10, 2010 7:05 am

sooner or later, i'll think of a title....

"tales of the pyro?" lol

i need something good...maybe it will come to me...
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Post by veraka » Sat Apr 10, 2010 7:46 am

From a writer to a writer, I'll say this; find a friend who loves reading and get them to read and reread your story; trust me, they'll catch a whole lot of stuff that even you can miss, not to mention could help give you some serious ideas.

titles, ehh; how about "A dragon's breath reborn?" still mentioning the pyro, but catchy as well. ;)
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Post by Zekafae » Mon Apr 12, 2010 4:13 am

My two cents. Writing is something that evolves over time and you'll develop a style all your own. With that from what I have read I think you have a good foundation on things so far. A very different style of your story than what I have done. You do inrii far greater a justice than I have for my own character. Keep up the good work.
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Post by veraka » Mon Apr 12, 2010 5:11 am

I have to agree with Zek on that; developing your own style comes with time and [i:1hwhq9cf]a lot[/i:1hwhq9cf] of patience. If you want some tidbits on how to do a good fight scene, talk to either me or Drakin; we both have a quite a bit of experience with that kinda writing.
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Post by Inriiaynrae Jaelre » Mon Apr 12, 2010 5:43 am

thanks yall!

my style is a 'to the point'. not alot of fluff or fancy descriptions. which stinks in school.

i dont think i do any better.

your welcome to take such scenes and fix them. i'm not too worried bout plagerism with it. but if anyone gets famous over it i get a cut...lol...oh dream on Inrii...
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right now i'm working on why Inrii has problems with males, unclad and water...

should be up tonight.
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Post by Aylstra Illianniis » Tue Apr 13, 2010 12:12 am

I've liked it so far. She's a pretty good character IMO. If you want a good idea of how to do a fight scene without TOO much description, i've got a coule of them in my tale. I've been at this stuff for a while now, and I also do comic book writing, (Not published yet, but working on that- got a webcomic project in the works) which uses a LOT of fight scenes, so I've had quite a bit of practice. If you need help with working something out, just pm and ask!
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Post by Inriiaynrae Jaelre » Mon Apr 19, 2010 8:01 am

thanks. if i need help, i'll definatly turn to all yall. :D (well, only God can give me the help i need...lol)
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so I added a [i:zm85skrq]'blooding'[/i:zm85skrq]- eh not too great...need to add something...
i also have added [i:zm85skrq]'caught in the middle'[/i:zm85skrq] (a small journey to daggerfalls for those in vale of shadow ,a tid bit of info...but not much). -still not that great.
i definately need to redo [i:zm85skrq]'Scout and Spy'[/i:zm85skrq], but i dunno what i wanna do....it's just cheesy...
and [i:zm85skrq]'into the underdark' [/i:zm85skrq]is in progress.
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title ideas: i want something with shadow and fire, possibly somthing with dragonblood or journey. but iffy with those two.

still looking.

and [b:zm85skrq]shadowfire[/b:zm85skrq], eh, i dunno. could work, if i find nothing better.

alright i'm done wasting yall's time...carry on... :p
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